Comments on One Ghana, One Voice: The Phoenix - George Amoah

Great stuff, Prince!

2009-07-11T00:36:18.352Z

Great stuff, Prince!

Here is a poem to celebrate President Obama's ...

2009-07-10T22:48:16.939Z

Here is a poem to celebrate President Obama's visit. It is on YouTube

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w_9DJ-agIdA

I'm sure too, LS. Just having a little fun!!!

2009-07-10T21:19:26.911Z

I'm sure too, LS. Just having a little fun!!!

THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU. ALL COMMENTS ARE ...

2009-07-10T14:07:53.187Z

THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU.
ALL COMMENTS ARE WELL NOTED AND WILL BE TAKEN EXTREMELY SERIOUS FOR THOSE ARE THE THINGS THAT WILL MAKE ME A BETTER WRITER.
THANK YOU.

Rob, I have no problem with exclamation marks, I u...

2009-07-10T11:45:35.384Z

Rob, I have no problem with exclamation marks, I use them myself. I only made a note about the volume.

For me it's a poem about a mythical bird, and I see the spectators anticipating some kind of renewal/resurrection at the phoenix' rebirth. It is the same at any festival whether you're talking Christmas or Hogbetsotso.

Okigbo says: if a poem can elicit a response either in physical or emotional terms from an audience, the poem has succeeded.

So I'm sure I'll find a route into the other poems.

Cheers

Oh, LS, how are you going to survive a whole month...

2009-07-09T23:38:59.375Z

Oh, LS, how are you going to survive a whole month of football poems?

I've looked the others over and I think they are all exclamation mark free, if that helps :)

oh no! we are just discussion and all criticism ar...

2009-07-09T16:00:19.881Z

oh no!
we are just discussion and all criticism are welcome because i believe criticisms make us better persons.

uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu..sumbodi kannot tak...

2009-07-09T15:40:00.364Z

uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu..sumbodi kannot take critisism..lol

FAIR ENOUGH. AM OK WITH THAT

2009-07-09T14:01:37.008Z

FAIR ENOUGH.
AM OK WITH THAT

Well, George this may be something to do with how ...

2009-07-09T13:21:15.124Z

Well, George this may be something to do with how I'm processing this. I agree, I'd rather go into a trance than watch football; but all the same I'm accessing this differently.

Cheers

dont worry LS, all of us can't be passionate a...

2009-07-09T13:04:24.654Z

dont worry LS, all of us can't be passionate about all things u know?
some will, some won't and that is what makes us human or it is not?

No Rob, I will myself to snore when ppl start talk...

2009-07-09T12:23:42.640Z

No Rob, I will myself to snore when ppl start talking football.

George, I understand the fact that it's an emotional game for the spectators and other supporters. Maybe I'm old fashioned.

Cheers

THANK YOU ALL. I HAVE ALWAYS BELIEVED THAT ANYTHIN...

2009-07-09T11:22:11.631Z

THANK YOU ALL. I HAVE ALWAYS BELIEVED THAT ANYTHING I WRITE OR READ, I SHOULD BE ABLE TO MAKE A MENTAL PICTURE OF IT SO WITH THAT AS HINDSIGHT I WILL GIVE OUT GOOD MATERIALS.
AND LS!
ITS A GAME OF SOCCER I TALK ABOUT AND EMOTIONS ABOUND IN THAT ARENA HENCE IT NEEDS BE EXPRESSED APPROPRIATELY.
DON'T YOU THINK SO?

LOUD CROWD & SUITABLE EXCLAMATIONS I agree ...

2009-07-09T10:38:28.717Z

LOUD CROWD & SUITABLE EXCLAMATIONS

I agree the exclamation marks are appropriate usages; representing the spectators whose excited - and sometimes angry - voice plays a role on the field.

May I also clarify an ambiguous (or misleading) statement I made concerning Gerorge's use of proper grammar.

I had wanted to say that; if, on the opposite, he hadn't used formal language, it could have caused me to criticise him, although poetic licence is by no means forbidden.

I would have been critical because I see 'The Phoenix' as a stately poem. And should therefore be written with all propriety - without the whiff of vain words. In that sense, l must be contented that George hasn't failed.

Obviously you haven't been to many games then,...

2009-07-08T17:51:02.476Z

Obviously you haven't been to many games then, LS!!

Ha!!!!

I'm worried about the number of exclamation m...

2009-07-08T15:48:42.220Z

I'm worried about the number of exclamation marks!

AT LONG LAST OGOV HAS A SCOREBOARD Such is life: ...

2009-07-08T10:03:25.227Z

AT LONG LAST OGOV HAS A SCOREBOARD

Such is life: when one falls, 'admirers mourn and detractors jubilate',inevitably. But at the end of the day, fate will be on the side of those who persevere in the arena of life. And victory shall be theirs.

If I had been on the verge of giving-up my interest in the cult of poetry, I believe 'The Phoenix' could have beckoned me. In fact, it could have kicked me in. It could have given me hope, so to say.

Not only does 'The Phoenix' gives hope, it also has a generous display of flamboyance; as it pleases the eye - though it does not fall within the category of shape poems. Like a collage, the sight alone is enough to be appreciated.

As a nation who eat(s) football, I'm proud that George has expressed this devotion in a manner as due our status. Moreover, he did it with much respect for grammar - thus without resorting to poetic licence, which may have caused me to forbid his style.

'The Phoenix' has got the muscle that can wrestle for the first prize in any competition. I bet it has!

George, keep writing about the supreme sport. Welldone.

thank you price

2009-07-06T08:40:47.605Z

thank you price

The likening of soccer and poetry to the phoenix i...

2009-07-05T14:59:22.312Z

The likening of soccer and poetry to the phoenix is interesting. I love that theme in your work. Keep it up!